Posted: August 14, 2014 in Poetry
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He only loves you
From the bottom of his heart
I’ll love you from the top down

He only wants to live in a home
I want to live in the clouds
The dwelling place of souls

He only wants you
For who you were
I want you for who you are and
Who you’ll become

You’re only a number to him
A one or maybe less
But I love you like the number pi

You’re only his sweetheart
His honey
But you are my food
The main ingredient in every recipe

He only wants to be your king
I want you to be my queen

He only asked
For your hand
I’m asking for your whole body
Even the invisible parts

  1. Some very clever word choice here; nicely done!

  2. Katarina says:

    “I want to live in the clouds
    The dwelling place of souls” – I love that verses.
    Beautiful poem.

  3. Phen Weston says:

    Phenomenal. What a testament to love. A beautiful idea and so so so many efulgent (XD) lines, but the fourth stanza is perfection times pi!!!

  4. Patience says:

    So beautiful. I love the pi line as well as living in the clouds. Such a great piece! πŸ™‚

  5. Love the neutrality and depth. A warming and appreciated share.

  6. Persuasive poetry, I like it! πŸ™‚ She should listen up.

  7. Miranda Stone says:

    So much to love about this poem, Benjamin! The line “But I love you like the number pi” is splendid. And that last stanza really brings the narrator’s yearning home to the reader. Excellent work.

    • bejamin4 says:

      Thanks for your thoughtful comment, Miranda. Something I always look forward to them :). Hope today treated you kinder than yesterday! The weekend is almost here again πŸ™‚

  8. Johnny Ojanpera says:

    This is heavy, man. Very well said. Makes me hate that dude.

  9. This is brilliant. What a love story! There’s nothing like true and honest feelings to say ‘in your face!’.

  10. stacilys says:

    Wow. Now that is pure passion and commitment. If she’s wise, she’ll do what is right.

    • bejamin4 says:

      Haha, I wish. Though she hasn’t picked me yet :(. All I can do is pray and hope she might change her mind, though it is probably too late.

      • stacilys says:

        Awwwwwww, sorry to hear that. Maybe you’ll meet someone 10 times better, and your poem would breathe into life. And not just you to her, but her to you as well.

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